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when i grow up, 
not everything will be beautiful.
we, us, you and me, they won't be simple terms
but more like impossible math problems where

x= you and y= me, 
z is all the times i have to derail a train
of thought, m is the number of times 
i wish you were my last first kiss 
and we'll throw n in there as that one
variable we don't fucking know 
that keeps us from equaling us.

we'll end up making a very dangerous alphabet soup,
but leave out the vowels, they always tasted rather bitter
when we were children and i doubt that will change
in any future. i'll tell you a secret, 

happiness can be a rather deceptive bitch, 
especially when we become math problems,
statistics, numbers. but secrets, they fall 
on deaf ears because you never listen, 
and you never change

so i'll just sit here and paint my toes 
various bright colors you always hated
while you learn the names of girls in movies
and business management, but don't worry,
i'll still be here when you get home,

well. maybe. we haven't happened yet,
remember?
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:iconthebluedangercorn:
TheBlueDangercorn Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013  Student Writer
now my favorite poem in existence, and i appreciate that you wrote it.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013
:blush:
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:iconbeeinthebottle:
beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013   Writer
:heart: Well-written, and well done! Congrats on the DD!
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2013
Thank you!
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:iconangel-regiment:
Angel-Regiment Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Now THAT'S poetry!
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconlegendaryjd:
LegendaryJD Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely.  Favorited.  = )
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconsammur-amat:
Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   General Artist
congratulations on the DD, dolly! this is marvelous! :love:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconartheartdog:
ARTheARTdog Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
If only I could hit the:+fav: button more than once.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconintelligentzombie:
IntelligentZombie Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so beautiful; it's been in my favorites for ages but I don't think I ever said anything, gah! :la: :love: Congratulations on the DD, this is so cool! :squee:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconzcleirzac:
ZCLEIRZAC Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
It's the writing like these that make me want more literature, and appreciate it. A well deserved DD to you, as this is a simply beautiful and stunning poem.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Thank you. :heart:


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:iconzcleirzac:
ZCLEIRZAC Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You deserve it. :)
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:iconperfling:
Perfling Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Oh my gosh, I love this part:


but more like impossible math problems where

x= you and y= me, 
z is all the times i have to derail a train
of thought, m is the number of times 
i wish you were my last first kiss 
and we'll throw n in there as that one
variable we don't fucking know 
that keeps us from equaling us.

:) :heart:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:icongoninja:
goninja Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Makes me think of all the girls I could of treated better and not been a "jerk".
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconjoel-wade:
Joel-Wade Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013   General Artist
Nice work, I like how it isn't all laid out straight and has room for interpretation,
makes it more personal to the reader as they fill in the blanks, love it
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconcrocodilekickingbear:
CrocodileKickingBear Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
What an interesting thought process...
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconhunterbeinghunted:
HunterBeingHunted Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
woah!.. well deserved dd, made me think a lot..was kinda sad as well but not too sad.. loved it! :D
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconpippinfox:
PippinFox Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredible work; this is amazing :heart: Thank you for writing this.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconmeerkatlover27:
meerkatlover27 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Hits me right in the feels
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconshonalikapoor:
ShonaliKapoor Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconsavoci:
Savoci Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
A well-deserved DD! This is amazing.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconlintu47:
lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconcunningchicken:
CunningChicken Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I. LOVE. THIS. OH. MY. GOD.

Not happy-dappy, not depressingly sad.  Just raw emotion stew, straight from the heart and bled onto the page. I love this.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconzjoriz:
zJoriz Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Beautiful writing!
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconhogret:
hogret Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Just wonderful.  So spare yet so dense.
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconsimplysilent:
SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
Thank you! :heart:
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:iconintricately-ordinary:
intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
congratulations on your well-deserved DD <3 this is fantastic
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013
:heart:
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:iconnullibicity:
Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:faint: This stole my breath. The raw emotion to this piece was absolutely stunning, and I loved that you related the characters - and their life - to a math problem. Because of this, I'd have to say that the second stanza was my favorite, however this whole piece was just wonderfully crafted and fantastically executed.
You have this unique way with words that I haven't seen in, well, ever - as far as I know. It would be my pleasure to watch you, and I look forward to seeing more of your stunning work! :tighthug:
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:icontoxic--sunrise:
toxic--sunrise Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013
I like the first two stanzas, and the one second to last as well. I had fun writing it, too.

You're a doll:heart:
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:iconnullibicity:
Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I think some of the best pieces are created when the artist enjoys their work. ;)
The fact that you could enjoy yourself with this one makes me so very happy: I know how hard it is to like your own work sometimes... so to hear you have a good opinion of it, and that you enjoyed it, really brings a smile to my face. :heart:

Meanwhile, you are too kind.. but thank you. I appreciate your generous words :tighthug: :heart:
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